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Jack/Kate - "whisper" drabble

I'm sure this has been ficced to death, but ...



He wouldn’t look at her, just kept his head down, hands folded over his chair, its back one more barrier between them. He said goodbye but the man she knew was already gone.

He stood to leave, and then, in afterthought, leaned in close, whispering in her ear, “I’ll come back for you.” And she believed him.

But now there is nowhere to go, nothing to come back from.

There are no more cameras, no one watching them anymore, but he still won’t look at her.

All she has left is his whispered promise, the one he never meant to keep.



And hey, has anyone else exceeded 100 tags for, say, Lost fic? Now what? Well, there's always memories.

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littlehands
Apr. 9th, 2007 07:16 pm (UTC)
I love seeing all the fic about that scene, really I don't think it's been fic'd to death yet - or at least not until I take a stab at it.

Can you make a new tag, like lost fic2? I don't use tags so I have no idea if that would work.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:34 am (UTC)
Thanks! I don't always read Jack/Kate so I'm not sure how much it's been written, but that's where my mind went with that prompt. And hey, why not fic it yourself? :)

I guess I will come up with a new lost fic tag, it'd just be handy to keep using the same one!
pippilottah
Apr. 9th, 2007 07:51 pm (UTC)
I suppose one of the good things about not really being in Lost fandom anymore is that I never read the same scenario twice.
This is really nice, I am liking these drabble things.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:35 am (UTC)
Glad you liked and thanks for reading, esp. if you're not reading much Lost fic these days. At least drabbles are relatively undemanding! :) I'm having fun with them too.
inthekeyofd
Apr. 9th, 2007 08:26 pm (UTC)
Oh that last line killed me.

Thank you. *smile*

I love the drabbles!!
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:35 am (UTC)
Thank you, m'dear! Yeah, I don't think Jack was lying to her when he said that but sh has to feel betrayed now, all the same.
frightened
Apr. 9th, 2007 09:31 pm (UTC)
the one he never meant to keep.

Ooh. Ouch. Ooh. Cos she'd expect that sort of behaviour from Sawyer or herself, but good-guy-Jack? He's so fucked up right now. I mean, more than usual. Or possibly ditching a load of responsibility he never asked for in the first place is a sign of getting less fucked-up, I don't know.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:38 am (UTC)
It does hurt, doesn't it? I didn't mean to go there when I started writing but then it kind of clicked into place. I do think he meant to come back for her when he said it, but if he can't stand by her now, then I can see where she would doubt that he had ever meant to come back. And yeah, our Jack is pretty damn fucked-up right now. For him to turn on her is just ... wow. So harsh.
frightened
Apr. 10th, 2007 02:21 pm (UTC)
Did I say I liked your fic with Kate drugging loads of guys? I can't remember. I'm just getting into the habit of leaving feedback when I like fic. But I meant to.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:01 pm (UTC)
I'm not sure, but thanks for the fb now. :) Appreciated!
themoononastick
Apr. 9th, 2007 11:58 pm (UTC)
Ooh that's hurty good. *nods* Yet another great drabble! :)

As for the tag thing - maybe start a new one, how about doing it by year so lost_fic2007 maybe?
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:40 am (UTC)
Thank you, love. I can see where she would doubt everything he said to her since he's acting like she betrayed him when it must feel like the other way around right about now.

And I think that's exactly what I'll do re: the fic tags but it's kind of annoying! *harrumphs*
hendercats
Apr. 10th, 2007 12:53 am (UTC)
Great drabble! The opening paragraph is so strong, and says so much, it's wonderful.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 05:41 am (UTC)
Thank you! I think it was pretty significant how he chose to put the chair between them and his whole body language was so closed-off and shutdown. It was such a powerful scene, I'm glad I could do it justice!
gottalovev
Apr. 11th, 2007 12:52 am (UTC)
ow! that is a harsh last line. as you said before, he probably ment it then, but what will he do now.. no one knows.

ah, sweetie, I am far from the hundred in the fic tag! lol! or any tag, in fact... that sucks though. tags are my frined. maybe un-tag the oldest of them all while you are sure they are in the memories? and the oldest fic-tag used has the instructions to find the old (but good) stuff?
halfdutch
Apr. 21st, 2007 11:25 pm (UTC)
Wow, I'm so late in replying to this. Sorry!

And you know, I do think he meant it at the time but now everything has changed. He certainly meant to save them all but now .... who knows what's happened to him?

And I ended up going with season-specific tags but then I was like, "What do I do with a fic I wrote during S3 that's set during S1?" I figured that gets an S1 tag.

Anyway, thanks for reading! ;)
gemjam
Apr. 11th, 2007 06:07 pm (UTC)
I really like the ache of this. That goodbye on the show was painful, and I think you dealt with the aftermath really well here, what it must feel like for them now that he's still stuck there. Jack's walls are definitely up, and I think that scares Kate, and it hurts her. She really did have the best of intentions, and she'd expect Jack to understand that, but he won't let her in. So sad that she no longer believes the promise that he made.
halfdutch
Apr. 21st, 2007 11:27 pm (UTC)
Thank you, dear. I hadn't meant to end it on such a harsh note but then I realized how hurt and betrayed Kate must feel and maybe, retroactively, she's beginning to doubt his intentions all along. And that he didn't give her credit for her good intentions, which really were just to get him back, that's got to hurt like crazy. I do wish they were dealing with more that side of things than reducing it all to jealousy over Juliet.

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