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The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 4

Title: The Bachelor: Paradise Island, Part 4
Pairings: Jack/various women, Jack/Sawyer
Rating: PG-13
Summary: When troubling allegations surface, Jack has to decide whether to send one woman home early
Note: Thanks again to zelda_zee for the beta! There's a little less crack in this chapter, FWIW.

Part 1, Part 2, Part 3



Jack stared at Kate’s mug shot, trying to decide if this was some kind of joke.

He couldn’t possibly sit on this all night and just board a plane to Italy in the morning without getting to the bottom of this. Kate would be gone too, back to Iowa, and he needed to talk to her. Now.

Jack remembered Sawyer’s offer to help if he ever needed to talk to one of the women alone. He thought of how Sawyer had shared the videotape of Sun with him. He didn’t want to believe that Sawyer was behind this, but either way, Sawyer was going to give him some answers.

He dressed quickly and went to Sawyer’s room. A light rap on the door got no response, so he tried the handle. Unlocked, as luck would have it. He crept inside, carefully shutting the door behind him. Soft snores guided him to Sawyer’s bed in the darkness. He shook him gently but Sawyer just rolled over with an annoyed huff.

“Sawyer,” Jack said sharply, shaking him harder.

“Wha?” Sawyer sat up, finally. “Jack? What time is it?”

”Two, I think. Turn on the light. I need to show you something.”

Sawyer grunted and reached for the bedside lamp. He squinted at the sudden brightness.

“So what couldn’t wait ‘till the morning, hot shot?”

”This.” Jack thrust the piece of paper into Sawyer’s face.

Sawyer took a moment to focus on it. When he did, his shock seemed genuine.

“What the hell is this?” Sawyer asked. “Where’d you get it?”

”Someone slid it under my door a few minutes ago.” He waited a beat. “Thought it might have been you.”

“Me?” Sawyer’s voice rose an octave in indignation. “This is the first I’m layin’ eyes on it, same as you.”

”Is it real?”

Sawyer’s forehead was knitted in concentration. “Dunno. They do background checks on all the women...”

“They didn’t catch Ana.”

“Oh, they knew about her. Thought she’d liven things up.”

Jack snorted. “Yeah, so this is more of the same?”

”Shit if I know. Obviously someone doesn’t want Kate to make it to the finish line.”

“I’ve got to talk to her. Now.”

”Sure thing.” Sawyer nodded. He rubbed his head, which only made his bed-ruffled hair worse, and got up. Jack looked away when he realized Sawyer slept in the nude, but not before catching sight of a pair of dimples on the small of his back, just above his tan line, that neatly matched those on his face. They were endearing somehow, just like the way Sawyer was shuffling towards his closet, still sleepily trying to smooth his tangled hair.

Sawyer threw on some clothes and they headed down to where Jack’s car was parked. Jack walked towards it and Sawyer stopped him. “Not the sports car. Got a camera inside.”

“Oh.” Jack was going to have to make a list of all the ways he was realizing just what a chump he was.

“We’ll take my car.” He led the way to a sleek black Mustang. Jimi Hendrix blared from the stereo when Sawyer started the ignition. "Sorry," he said, hastily turning it down.

On the 20 minute drive, they came up with a plan. Sawyer would call the house and whoever answered would tell Kate that there was a family emergency. When Kate came to the phone, he’d tell her to play along and meet him outside.

Kate was waiting for them on the steps when they drove up. She had thrown a robe on over her pajamas.

“Okay, so what’s really going on?” she said when Jack rolled down the window. “Because if this is some kind of booty call...”

“Get in,” Jack said, his tone short and clipped. She glanced in confusion at Sawyer, who nodded. She climbed into the backseat and the second she closed the door, Sawyer drove back down the driveway, until the house had disappeared in the rearview mirror. “Will one of you please tell me what’s going on? You’re starting to scare me.”

Sawyer turned on the dome light and Jack reached back over the seat to hand Kate the incriminating paper. “Is this real?”

She looked like she might be sick. Her eyes swam as she stared at the photo. She looked from one to the other and then nodded. “Yes,” she said in a dull voice. “That’s me.”

“And what it says? Is that true?”

“Yes.” They could barely hear her. “How did... I don’t understand ... those records were sealed. They were supposed to be sealed.”

Sawyer and Jack exchanged glances.

“I’ll leave. I’m so sorry. I just ... I never thought...” She covered her face with her hands, letting the paper drop to the floor of the car.

“So that’s it? You’re not even going to explain?” Jack’s anger spiked. If this was true, what on earth was she doing here? How could he possibly have developed any feelings for her? Was he such a bad judge of character as that? He would call the producers in the morning, tell them he was done, that this whole thing was a sham and he was pulling out. It was a joke to think he’d find love on a reality TV show, even if the deck hadn’t been deliberately stacked against him.

”Does it matter?”

“Yes, it does.”

Kate stared past him, her eyes glassy. “I was 16. He was my stepfather. He wouldn’t stop hurting my mother, so one day I..... I decided it was enough.” Her voice strengthened with resolve, like she was making the decision to act all over again. “So I shot him. I shot him in the head. And I’d do it again.”

”I ... didn’t know,” Jack finally said. Sawyer cleared his throat and announced he needed a smoke. He exited the car, leaving them alone.

Jack got out and joined Kate in the backseat. She looked so small, suddenly, so vulnerable and frail, as if she’d reverted back to that scared teenager.

“I’m sorry, Kate. That must have been...”

“Yeah,” she said with a little laugh. “I thought it was all behind me. I should have known.”

“Did he hurt you?” Jack asked softly, not sure he had the right to ask the question.

“No. No, he never touched me.” Her denial came so quickly and emphatically that it only piqued Jack’s suspicions, but he didn’t press the point.

“How could anyone know?” she went to reach for the paper again. He slipped his arm around her, stopping her from reaching down. He drew her body against him instead, until her head rested on his chest.

“Shhhh, it’s okay,” he said softly, stroking her hair. “Someone’s just out to make sure I don’t pick you. Well, they figured wrong.”

“You don’t want me to go?”

”No. We won’t say anything about it. We’ll act like it never happened. And I’ll go to Iowa and meet your...” He hesitated, searching for another words besides “parents.” “Meet your family, stick to the plan.”

”Jack, are you sure?”

He was. He knew it was just the kind of thing his father always gave him grief for, that urge to reach out to the helpless, but he felt bound to her now. Someone was out to get her and it was his job to protect her. She’d already been through more than he could imagine.

---

Eventually, Sawyer tapped at the window, pointing at his watch. He got in the driver’s seat and started the engine. “Gotta get Prince Charming here home,” he said as he drove back to the women’s house. “And I think it’s high time you were in bed yourself, Princess.”

He pulled up in front of the door. Kate wiped her eyes and nodded. “Thank you, Jack,” she said and kissed him on the cheek. “And you, Sawyer.”

She got out, shivering a bit from the cold. Jack put his arm around her and walked her to the door. He let out a deep breath once it clicked shut.

He didn’t speak as he got back into the front seat, just nodded at Sawyer to go.

“So, you still goin’ to Iowa?” Sawyer’s tone was casual.

“Yes. As far as I’m concerned, this never happened.”

“Okay, Doc.” Sawyer’s eyes held his briefly. “Best response to dirty tricks.”

They didn’t talk again until they arrived back at Bachelor HQ. They trod quietly up the stairs to their respective rooms. Jack hesitated outside his bedroom door. He was half afraid he’d find something else had been left for him.

“You need a nightcap,” Sawyer said knowingly and steered him back downstairs to the bar. It was almost eerie in the still of the night, with only the light of the moon stealing in from the wall of windows overlooking the pool. The rest of the room quietly stretched out into corners too dark to see, a far cry from the noise and energy of the cocktail parties that preceded each rose ceremony. Right now, Jack wanted to bask in the quiet, wanted to drink it down like whatever Sawyer was going to pour him.

“What’s your poison?” Sawyer stepped behind the bar and started pulling bottles by the light of the mini-fridge.

”Whiskey. Straight.”

“You got it.”

Sawyer handed him a double and Jack drained it in a few swallows. He glanced at his watch; it read 4:23. “The limo’s coming at 7. No point in going to bed,” he sighed and settled down on the floor next to the bar, stretching out his weary legs, captivated by the way the moonlight reflected off the pool and onto the ceiling above. He couldn’t be drunk, already could he?

Sawyer stumbled once in the darkness, swearing softly, and then joined him on the floor. He’d brought the bottle with him and topped off Jack’s glass. “You’re not drivin’ and you’re not flyin’....”

“And I’m not sleepin’...” Jack mimicked Sawyer’s accent, which had only grown thicker with a touch of alcohol. They drank silently for another few minutes. “Look,” Jack said, pointing up at the light dancing on the ceiling.

Sawyer’s laugh sounded warm and close. “You are one starry-eyed motherfucker, aren’t you? You always see the good in everything?”

“I don’t know,” Jack answered stiffly, feeling around for the insult he was sure was there.

“Hell, it’s sweet,” Sawyer drawled, inching closer, until Jack could feel the heat of his breath on his neck. In the space of the last drink, their arms and legs had ended up pressed together as they slouched against the bar. Sawyer’s head tipped back, his lips brushing Jack’s ear. ”You’re one of the good ones, Jack. Don’t you let them change that.” He sounded almost angry and Jack shivered. It was just the puff of Sawyer’s exhalation raising the hairs on the back of his neck, he told himself, not the heat of this body pressing against him, or the strange intensity in Sawyer’s voice.

That, there, the quick press of lips just under his ear, was that a kiss, a sloppy gesture between friends at four in the morning after a wrecked night? Or just proof that Sawyer was as drunk and uncoordinated as Jack felt?

Sawyer slowly pulled away with a sigh. “You should go to bed.”

“I’m not tired.” He felt a little dizzy, like he’d been holding his breath.

“You want the camera crew to find you here in the morning, passed out on the floor?”

Jack made an incoherent noise of dismissal.

”Okay, well, I’m going to bed.” Sawyer staggered to his feet. “And my advice is you do the same.”

He tried to decide if that was some kind of invitation as he watched Sawyer walk away Soon, all he could see of him was that mop of unruly blonde hair, and then he couldn’t see that anymore. A thud, followed by a muffled curse, came from the stairs but apparently Sawyer righted himself soon enough because all he heard was the hum of the refrigerator.

He reluctantly got to his feet. Sawyer was right, they shouldn’t find him down here. With any luck, tonight’s drama would stay where it was, between the three of them. He trudged slowly up the stairs, taking extravagant care not to trip. He reached his room without incident and put everything else from his mind as he shrugged off his clothes and climbed into bed.

-----

Bachelor production office

Tom rubbed at his face sleepily. “How are we going to handle this?”

Ben pointed at the paused image of Kate with the remote. “I think we see how the Iowa visit plays out. In the meantime, we get everything on camera that we can.”

“So we’re going to treat it as...”

“As a family crisis,” Isabel said, in a tone that brooked no discussion.

Ben hit “PLAY.”

KATE: Jack is ... such a great guy. He’s so unbelievably sweet and generous. But I’m not even thinking about the competition right now. She starts to tear up. I’m sorry, can I have a minute?

GABRIELA: I feel very badly for Kate. My father is not in good health and I wasn’t sure that coming here was such a good idea. But he wants to see me married and of course I want to make him happy. I hope Kate’s mother will be okay. Your family is more important than anything at a time like this.

JULIET: It’s terribly upsetting, of course. I just ... I don’t want to sound petty, but I get the feeling there’s something else going on here. All these women have a sob story and they’re all trying to tug on Jack’s heartstrings. He’s such a sweet guy and he feels sorry for them all. I just don’t want to see him make a choice based on feeling sorry for someone.

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SHANNON: I was the one who answered the phone and went to wake Kate up. She looked pretty shook up when she came back in. I hope her mom’s going to be okay; she said they thought it might be a heart attack. I just can’t believe all the bad things that have happened so far... She trails off and leans forward, her head cocked to one side. Okay, I just have to wonder why Jack was the one to tell her and why he had to come all the way over here to do it. Maybe they had to figure out if he’s still going to visit her family now but, still. She raises an eyebrow. If you ask me, he just wanted to get her alone. Except Sawyer was there too, right? C’mon, a booty call with those two? I wouldn’t say no. Laughter is clearly heard off-camera. Right? Can I not say that? She starts to laugh too. Steve? Scott? You guys up for a threesome? She dissolves into giggles and the footage ends.

“Uh... we’re going to cut that, right?” Tom looked around to gauge reaction.

“Well, we can hardly have someone talking about threeways on ABC in primetime,” Ben said drily.

“We always seem to end up cutting every time she says something funny,” Tom noted. “Like her nickname for the island."

"Craphole Island?" Isabel said icily. "I don't think our advertisers would be amused."

"But she’s going to come off as completely melancholy.”

“You mean sympathetic,” Isabel corrected. “Definitely final rose material.”

“Ahh, right,” Tom nodded. “Very sympathetic.”
----

END PART 4

Coming up on The Bachelor: Paradise Island: (Voiceover) Jack travels to romantic Venice. Gabriela and Jack share a gondola ride. Gabriela, “They say you will find eternal love, if you share a kiss under this bridge at sunset.” They kiss. And Juliet reveals an astonishing secret!

cap courtesy of crystalkirk ;D

Comments

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isis2015
May. 16th, 2007 11:23 pm (UTC)
It shouldn't come as a surprise that my favorite parts of this are the moments between Jack and Sawyer. You handled the situation with Kate and her past very well, and it felt true to Jack's character that he wouldn't let that make him send her home, but the moments between Jack and Sawyer were just wonderful. You really feel the attraction growing and the attachment they've begun to form to each other.

I especially love this: Sawyer’s head tipped back, his lips brushing Jack’s ear. ”You’re one of the good ones, Jack. Don’t you let them change that.” He sounded almost angry and Jack shivered. It kinda gives you the feeling that Sawyer may have a vague idea what's going on behind the scenes and he's worried for Jack, worried that he's going to change into a different person because of it. I love what that says about Sawyer's feelings for Jack, and that Jack is beginning to discover his feelings for Sawyer (and his back dimples ;D).

I love this, and I can't wait to see where you take it next. ♥
halfdutch
May. 17th, 2007 02:09 am (UTC)
Aww, I love that you love that Jack/Sawyer scene. :) I'm a bit impatient to get their storyline going but it's not the only one I'm dealing with, of course! And I always love Sawyer being protective of Jack and I'm glad you do too.

Very pelased you're still enjoying the ride!
astra2104
May. 16th, 2007 11:39 pm (UTC)
Wohoo, the Jack and Sawyer action is on! Yay!

Sawyer’s head tipped back, his lips brushing Jack’s ear. ”You’re one of the good ones, Jack. Don’t you let them change that.” He sounded almost angry and Jack shivered. It was just the puff of Sawyer’s exhalation raising the hairs on the back of his neck, he told himself, not the heat of this body pressing against him, or the strange intensity in Sawyer’s voice.

Awww...I love that. But how will it continue? And what about Kate?
I kinda regret now that I've never watched the show properly, I want to see where you get your inspiration from, lol!
:)
halfdutch
May. 17th, 2007 02:13 am (UTC)
Aww, woo for Jack/Sawyer action! ;) And don't worry, there'll be more, only Jack has a few hometowns to visit first!

Hee, I'm very amused that this fic is piquing your interest in real Bachelor! It's a guilty pleasure, definitely, because you're embarrassed for everyone participating but sometimes there are these genuine moments -- but they're surrounded by tons of cheese and awkwardness. This time, I think the bachelor has really fallen in love with one girl and it's very genuine but we shall see. Watching other people getting their heart broken on TV is always going to be uncomfortable! But there *is* tons of cattiness and scheming and absurd declarations of love after a very short time. So much material to work with!
fosfomifira
May. 16th, 2007 11:40 pm (UTC)
I obviously loved the Jack/Sawyer moments, sleepy!Sawyer is made of the cute (as is Jack noticing his back dimples). The part where drunk!Sawyer trips walking up the staira cracked me up, but what really did it for me was Shannon's interview, cracking up jokes about threesomes. She's such a blast! I miss her so.

And I wouldn't say no to a booty call with those two either, but that's not a surprise, is it?

Loving it :D
halfdutch
May. 17th, 2007 02:15 am (UTC)
Back dimple icon! I need to get me one of those! Aww, who doesn't love Sawyer in all his incarnations? And I thought this chapter needed a bit more sass so of course it had to be Shannon! And very perceptive she is too! ;)
demonqueen666
May. 16th, 2007 11:46 pm (UTC)
Jack and Sawyer alone time, Jack/Kate/Sawyer subtext of secret angst, and Shannon being, well...Shannon! (plus, bonus appearance by Scott and Steve)

What can I say? I love it :D
halfdutch
May. 17th, 2007 02:16 am (UTC)
Hee, I didn't want to bring in *every* Lost character but I figured Scott & Steve would be fun to throw into the mix. And they might censor Shannon but of course we love her the way she is, inappropriateness and all. :)
two_five
May. 17th, 2007 04:33 am (UTC)
Ahhhhh! I can't wait until the next part!
:D
halfdutch
May. 18th, 2007 03:46 am (UTC)
Currently in progress. *rubs hands together productively*
two_five
May. 18th, 2007 03:51 am (UTC)
Ooooooh! Can't wait!! :D
alemyrddin
May. 17th, 2007 07:26 am (UTC)
I'm smiling while I type this... Shannon joking about threesomes really cracked me up! And of course, I wouldn't say no, either *grins*
But I loved how you brought the story to a more serious level, dealing with Kate's problems. Of course Jack would have felt compelled to protect her. But what captures me most (what a surprise!) are the Jack/Sawyer moments... How Jack went to Sawyer for help, and how immediately Sawyer was on his side.
I think making this edition the first one Sawyer hosted was a brilliant idea: it makes his behaviour very realistic, like he is not yet used to tv tricks - even if he is of course less naive than Jack.
And you are really projecting enticing images... Sleepy!Sawyer, back dimples, his breath on Jack's neck... *sighs*
I'm very happy with this fic, it's like a breath of fresh air. :)
halfdutch
May. 18th, 2007 03:50 am (UTC)
I'm so glad you liked it taking a more serious tone as I was afraid some people were going to bail at this transition. I promise more laughs to come but yeah, things are getting more serious for everyone involved and I really didn't see a way around that with the story I want to write. (And to think, I originally thought this would be a one-off fic, not a whole series!)

And yes, Sawyer here is definitely more in the know than Jack but he's also pretty much of a straight shooter so someone playing dirty is news to him! Not that I think anything like this level of sabotage goes on in real life, but "shocking secrets" are always apt to come out.

And aww, a breath of fresh air? :) That makes me smile! And it's nice to have to something to occupy me in the countdown to the finale!



siluria
May. 17th, 2007 10:56 am (UTC)
Ooooooh, we're starting with the Jack/Sawyer *happy dance* I do like the gradual pacing with that one, little moments that will (hopefully) build to something really quite sweet... and hot... But I do like the Ben and Tom moments in the background too, that control they exert on what the viewers see.
halfdutch
May. 18th, 2007 03:53 am (UTC)
Aww, yes, I'm building slowly to something I hope you will enjoy between Jack and Sawyer.

I'm enjoying writing Ben and Tom calling the shots here and glad you're enjoying reading those parts! I think they would welcome more controversy in the real show and I'm not sure that they edit so extremely as to change someone's personality but it doesn't seem *that* far off from what I know of reality TV.
gemjam
May. 17th, 2007 03:58 pm (UTC)
Nice twist on the Kate thing, making her younger and her crime perhaps a little more sympathetic. I like that she's not on the run here, that it's all been dealt with already and this is her trying to get on with her life in a different way. I like the way that Jack dealt with everything, the way he couldn't stay mad at her and wanted to help her. Totally a Jack thing to do.

Jack and Sawyer getting drunk on the floor. I love that part. I love how they drew closer to each other as they sat there, leaning against one another. I love how Sawyer's kind of affectionate with him, and that little kiss that's Jack's not even sure was real. That was so hot and so sweet too. Also loved the part where Jack got a glimpse of naked!Sawyer and couldn't quite help having a tiny peek ;)

Also, I love Shannon here, she's so funny. I can see how she'd end up edited out a lot, she wasn't the most politically correct of people, I can see how she could be seen as offensive. I really liked the way you portrayed her here though.

Can't wait for these family visits...
halfdutch
May. 18th, 2007 03:59 am (UTC)
Thank you! You always leave such wonderful, detailed feedback. You're every writer's dream reader! :) I'm glad you like the slight changes with Kate's story here. It didn't seem possible to have a fugitive star in a reality TV show and this seemed like the best way around that, without whitewashing her past completely. I think it would rattle Jack (and, unlike canon, here he really wanted to know the truth!) but that it would bring out the protective side of him. That definitely tallies with my view of Jack, and yours too, I see!

And who could resist sneaking a peek at naked!Sawyer? :)

I thought this chapter needed a dose of humor and Shannon seemed just the girl to bring it. I think that maybe provocative or controversial comments might make it on air on most reality shows since they thrive on conflict and whatever drama arises from the contestants themselves. But in this case, I had the idea that they've cast all the women in certain roles and they are only going to show things that conform to that image. Whether it really works like that, to this extent, I can't say! :)

Family visits coming up! :) The Juliet one was a bit tricky but I think I got a handle on it finally!
iorwen107
May. 17th, 2007 10:57 pm (UTC)
Damn Kate always manages to pout/cry her way out of responsibility! Yeah I know I'm in the minority in my dislike of Kate but oh well. I'm also not a Jawyer fan so its a testament to your talent that I love this story so much. Thanks again for giving me a giggle as I take the long bus ride to work.
halfdutch
May. 18th, 2007 04:03 am (UTC)
Ha, well, I definitely have my issues with Kate on the show as well, but I still prefer hr to most of the other female characters. Mostly I try to ignore lots of canon regarding Kate and rewrite her to my own liking. Although she's definitely far from perfect here! And I'm trying to do right by most of the characters in this fic but I know my biases can't help but come out, LOL, especially as it nears the finale!

But I'm so flattered you're sticking with this, despite your disliking a lot of the pairings! I hope it continues to entertain. :)
haldoor
May. 18th, 2007 07:35 am (UTC)
I totally love this! You've woven it so well! (and the back dimples - GUH!) Gorgeous icon, btw - Sayid should be there somewhere too!!!
halfdutch
May. 18th, 2007 06:36 pm (UTC)
Aww, thank you! :) And who can resist the back dimples?

(The icon is an old one I resurrected, by here_after. Loved that GQ photo shoot!)

Sayid might appear. You never know! ;)
slightlyjillian
May. 19th, 2007 01:57 am (UTC)
Wow, now I'm really missing Shannon. Nicely done and a lovely chapter, as always. Your writing is always pleasing, but I think you have quite a masterful grasp of blending comedy and drama. :) I'm glad you made it a 'chapter' fic.
halfdutch
May. 19th, 2007 08:07 pm (UTC)
Oh, thank you! :) That is so sweet of you to say! And dammit, I miss Shannon too! I've never really written Jack/Shannon, so this is kind of fun. And I'm glad I decided to go with chapters too. I'm really enjoying exploring all the relationships and onscreen and behind-the-scenes dramas here! ;)
cmonkatiekatie
May. 20th, 2007 08:23 am (UTC)
Sawyer’s laugh sounded warm and close. “You are one starry-eyed motherfucker, aren’t you?

mmm, that's nice. And just the thing to read before bed, too, I'm basically gauranteed good dreams now. :)

I love how easily and seamlessly you segue from silly to serious. It reads really true and just makes me fall more in love with the whole set up and the execution, too.
halfdutch
May. 20th, 2007 09:35 pm (UTC)
Awww, that makes me smile, sweetie! :) Hope you had good dreams!

And I was worried that if I dropped *all* the crack that people would mind terribly, so I'm very happy to hear that you find the segue seamless! *loves*
gottalovev
May. 22nd, 2007 12:12 am (UTC)
yay for the Jack/Sawyer bits! :)

nice to have it build slowly, and Jack definitely seems intrigued.

I love your "coming up on The Bachelor: Paradise Island" promos! lol! it's like I can see it all, complete with voice over.

I'm so happy Shannon is still there, she cracks me up!
halfdutch
May. 23rd, 2007 12:37 am (UTC)
I was getting a bit impatient for some Jack/Sawyer bits as well! (Hmm, bits... sounds naughty! ;D)

And yay for the promos, LOL. It's one of the cheesiest things about reality TV, of course, the over-the-top promos! They used to promise "the most shocking rose ceremony yet!" until it got to be completely meaningless. But, unlike the people on most dating shows, these people really *do* have shocking secrets!

And aww, sharing the love for Shannon, of course. ;)
uhzoomzip
May. 22nd, 2007 08:20 pm (UTC)
finally, we get some j/s action! even if it's just confused drunken fumbling. and i love your funny shannon. looking forward to the next chapter! :-)
halfdutch
May. 23rd, 2007 12:38 am (UTC)
Hee, I had to sneak some J/S action in before the end, even of the confused, drunken fumbling variety. Next chapter is coming up! ;)
eponine119
May. 22nd, 2007 08:30 pm (UTC)
Oh, I love all the Jack and Sawyer in the middle of the night stuff.

Kate's funny, thinking it's a booty call...she totally would.

Shannon's bit at the end was really funny, too. Very well done.

Can't wait for more!
halfdutch
May. 23rd, 2007 12:40 am (UTC)
Anything can happen in the middle of the night, eh? :) Glad you're still with me as I'm taking a slightly more serious turn here. More coming soon!
elise_509
Jun. 3rd, 2007 05:49 pm (UTC)
I love Shannon in this. :) Her little comment to Scott and Steve is in-joke in its glory and I love it to pieces.

The whole bit of intrigue, angst and drama with Kate's "family crisis" is well played. I love the moment between Jack and Sawyer when Sawyer moves in so close and presses that sloppy kiss below Jack's ear. Such a small thing but it really seems big, not to mention the thought of Sawyer drawling and whispering to Jack is damn hot. ;)

Onto the next part! *loves you*
halfdutch
Jun. 4th, 2007 04:42 am (UTC)
Shannon sass is always welcome! :)

And this is where it all takes a more serious turn (and leaves a lot of crack by the wayside), so I'm glad you're still on board!

Aww, I loved that sloppy kiss too, and Jack trying to tell himself it wasn't what he thinks it was. But I'd like to know who could resist a drunken Sawyer drawling and whispering in your ear! :)

luna481516
Jun. 11th, 2007 09:44 pm (UTC)
These are fun.
I'm glad Sawyer had Hendrix on his car stereo and not country. Something makes me wonder if his shock at seeing Kate's mugshot was genuine, but I guess that's more island conman Sawyer than reality-show host Sawyer, huh. And it does matter to Bachelor Jack what Kate did, whereas on the island it purposely didn't--but it makes more sense this way.
“No. No, he never touched me.” Her denial came so quickly and emphatically that it only piqued Jack’s suspicions, but he didn’t press the point. I bet the Marshal didn't believe her either on that.
I liked how the clock read 4:23 - that was like the clock in Ana's hotel room when Christian knocked on the door.
Sweet testing of the waters by Sawyer, and Jack testing his own reactions.
And I'm still confused whether Shannon/Scott/Steve would be a threesome or a twosome, and who's dead and who's not...
Nice job!


halfdutch
Jun. 17th, 2007 04:35 pm (UTC)
Oh, I think Jack would want to know what Kate did! ;) I think the whole Lost viewership wanted to shove Jack when he stopped Kate from telling him her crime, way back in S1!

You know, I never watched that 2nd Ana ep (not being a fan of hers) so I didn't copy the clock time on purpose. Just one of those synchronous Lost things. :)

And hee, in this verse, Scott and Steve are both very much alive. And probably willing and eager to double team Shannon, if she was serious!

Glad you're enjoying it! :)
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