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Just Lines on Paper, 3:10 to Yuma Fic

Title: Just Lines on Paper
Fandom: 3:10 to Yuma
Pairing: Ben/Tommy, Ben/Charlie
Rating: PG



Charlie’s heart beat faster, a strange flutter in his chest, as he watched Ben, waited to see what he’d do. The man from the railroad had his gun to Tommy’s head, like he knew how much he meant to Ben, like he knew Ben cared almost as much for him as he did for the money in that coach.

Ben hesitated for just a moment; Charlie blinked when he fired, feeling that same rush like always when Ben killed a man, as sure and swift as God in his vengeance. There was just that split second of being glad it wasn’t him. It would never be him.

He always knew Tommy wouldn’t be around long. Sure, he was pretty, even Charlie had to admit. He knew he couldn’t compete with Tommy’s long lashes and those green eyes of his that Ben liked so well, so he just bided his time, until Tommy fucked up, until Ben grew tired of his puppy-dog ways.

And when he finally fucked up, Tommy fucked up but good -- got too greedy, too sloppy. Thought he could cross Ben.

Ben killed Tommy himself and when he drank to his memory, it was as a caution to every other man there. There was no regret in those clear eyes of his, just a cold warning. Ben’s gaze warmed when he turned towards him, when they were finally alone, but his eyes were on the woman behind the bar.

With a knowing smile, Charlie took himself off. He knew better than to stay when Ben got that look.

Outside, he took the drawing he’d found along the trail several nights ago, of Tommy’s full lips, long lashes soft against his cheek as he slept. Every detail of his bare torso was perfectly captured by Ben’s pencil. Charlie could almost feel the heat from the fire in the drawing.

He crumpled up the sketch, grinding it under his heel into the dirt of the street, until the paper tore.

Charlie would be waiting, of course. He was always waiting. He’d be here long after Ben forgot Tommy’s name.

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angelwen99
Sep. 10th, 2007 05:53 am (UTC)
It would never be him.
Poor Charlie. I think you got his yearning perfectly.
halfdutch
Sep. 10th, 2007 05:57 am (UTC)
Thanks! Glad you liked! This idea elbowed me hard during that scene! :)
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halfdutch
Sep. 10th, 2007 03:45 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much! :)
deej240z
Sep. 10th, 2007 03:56 pm (UTC)
Man, you're fast! And iconage too!

Poor doomed Tommy. And Charlie, little did he know. :) You brought out their longing/despair beautifully.

Off to icon some pics!
halfdutch
Sep. 10th, 2007 04:02 pm (UTC)
Thanks! :) And this was, of course, the idea I told you about. Glad you approve! And hey, there's a Ben/Dan comm called ... bridal_suite -- too perfect! :)

And hurrah, icons!
deej240z
Sep. 10th, 2007 04:42 pm (UTC)
The bridal suite! Priceless! I'm going to have to take a look. Those comms sure go up fast, don't they. :)
halfdutch
Sep. 10th, 2007 05:28 pm (UTC)
They sure do! :) I went looking last night and was happy to find several comms already! There's also threetentrain, which is for all things 3:10.
deej240z
Sep. 10th, 2007 06:10 pm (UTC)
wow, they're sprouting up all over. That's a good comm too. omg, while I was looking around, I clicked on "western" interests and there's a comm for Alias Smith & Jones!" I loved that show when I was a kid. Good memories. And bad.
halfdutch
Sep. 10th, 2007 10:04 pm (UTC)
Aww, I remember that show! :) I caught a rerun with my parents, last time I was home.
chwheeler
Sep. 10th, 2007 11:32 pm (UTC)
Ooohhh, poor Charlie. I think that sums up what I'm going to say. Good job and awwww. *goes to lick wounds*
halfdutch
Sep. 11th, 2007 12:19 am (UTC)
Thank you! I thought of this while watching the film -- you had to know that Charlie wasn't sorry to see the last of Tommy. But his loyalty was hardly rewarded, was it?
inthekeyofd
Sep. 13th, 2007 03:32 am (UTC)
Tommy was hot, he really was, and Charlie would have been jealous.

I love how you worked in Ben's drawing, the look on Ben's face at the woman, and Charlie knowing to leave.

And Charlie being there, just like he was.

Unlike Tommy. ;)
halfdutch
Sep. 13th, 2007 04:13 pm (UTC)
Thanks for reading, hon! :) Charlie's obsession with Ben is barely even subtext, yes? So, naturally I figured he'd be jealous of Tommy, who was very pretty! Very glad you liked this!
vamm_goda
Sep. 24th, 2007 06:29 pm (UTC)
He crumpled up the sketch, grinding it under his heel into the dirt of the street, until the paper tore.

This is just such a beautiful line. It sums up the entire story in one bright, vivid image, ties everything together. Wonderfully written!
halfdutch
Sep. 26th, 2007 12:40 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you for such lovely feedback! :)
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