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Clementine (Sawyer) G

Title: Clementine
Summary: Sawyer meets his daughter
Word count: 235
Rating: G
Note: Written for the Lost Riffs prompt "Reunion." Sorry if it's a little angsty. Thanks to zelda_zee for looking it over!



She stands behind her mother's legs, a small, shy girl with white-blonde hair and a little bow mouth pursed as if to start crying, squinting into the sun as she stares at her father for the first time.

Cassidy nudges her daughter's shoulder and the girl peeks out, a little bolder now that Sawyer has made himself smaller, crouching down to her eye-level. She considers him solemnly for a moment, those enormous eyes weighing him in their blue depths, so spookily like his own.

Sawyer smiles at her, strangely shy himself, and, just like that, she smiles back, a mirror of his own dimples appearing as if by magic.

She takes him by the hand and, without question, leads him to the swing set, climbing, with some difficulty, into the swing. Cassidy nods at him, so he goes ahead and pushes Clementine once, gently.

She lets out a series of high-pitched giggles, her blonde hair flying back and forth as she pumps her little legs, willing the swing to go higher. He pushes her again. It's an easy rhythm to fall into: he pushes and she laughs as she soars higher, sometimes looking back to make sure the next push is coming, sometimes simply trusting that it will.

"You shouldn't trust strangers," he wants to tell her, his heart sinking to think of the day she'll learn that for herself.

It's easier, right now, to just keep giving her that next push.

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jenthegypsy
Jan. 24th, 2008 01:50 am (UTC)
Oh, sweet Mother of Melancholy - that was just beautiful, in a breaks your heart sort of way. Absolutely perfect. *saves*
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 02:04 am (UTC)
Oh, thanks, hon. ♥ I was in a melancholy kind of mood but I'm glad you liked it!
isis2015
Jan. 24th, 2008 02:32 am (UTC)
Oh Lord. I wish I could think of something intelligent to say, but I can't. It's a beautiful, bittersweet piece hun. It's perfect.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:34 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you so much, hon. *loves* I'm glad you found it beautiful, even if it is bittersweet.
eponine119
Jan. 24th, 2008 03:01 am (UTC)
Awww. This is so sweet, and yet so perfect. I just love it. Him wanting to tell her not to trust strangers? Amazing.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:33 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you. That idea really got me. I guess that's why we love Sawyer, he just breaks your heart over and over.
hendercats
Jan. 24th, 2008 03:03 am (UTC)
she smiles back, a mirror of his own dimples appearing as if by magic
I absolutely love this line. So sad that he feels the need to tell her not to trust, then gives in and encourages her to do so. Marvelous fic!
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:31 am (UTC)
Thank you, hon. *hugs* I like to think she'd melt him down, a little.

*switching icons, heh*

Edited at 2008-01-24 05:31 am (UTC)
gottalovev
Jan. 24th, 2008 03:06 am (UTC)
*big sigh*

that is so bitter sweet. oh the innocence and innocence lost. it's tragic, come to think of it.

*hug you*
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:30 am (UTC)
*hugs back*

It is a little hopeful and a little hurty, isn't it? Sawyer's a bad bet to make a decent father and yet I can see it.
slybrunette
Jan. 24th, 2008 03:08 am (UTC)
"You shouldn't trust strangers," he wants to tell her, his heart sinking to think of the day she'll learn that for herself.

That line is heartbreaking. This whole thing is. Beautiful and bittersweet.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:28 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you. It kinda broke my heart too. ♥
corellianjedi
Jan. 24th, 2008 03:55 am (UTC)
It's so pretty and mopey and lovely. I love it.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:27 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I was feeling rather mopey today, so that's a perfect word to use!
aboutbunnies
Jan. 24th, 2008 04:10 am (UTC)
Oh. So sweet and sad. I love it!

"You shouldn't trust strangers," he wants to tell her, his heart sinking to think of the day she'll learn that for herself.
Perfect.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:27 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you! I don't usually go in for kid!fic but this is the first idea that occurred to me and I'm glad I went with it. ♥
zelda_zee
Jan. 24th, 2008 04:27 am (UTC)
Yep, this is a little gem, a small, sweet, poignant snippet. I love it.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:25 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you so much, hon. I'm glad I wrote it. Thank you for hosting the riffs again. It's a wonderful outlet for us all, in so many ways. ♥
elliotsmelliot
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:08 am (UTC)
This was really well done. I think I found this less angsty than most because I was struck by her immediate trust and unlike her father, I was optimistic that it wasn't necessarily a bad thing. Perhaps he's the one who should look out because it also read like she had inherited his ability to charm.
halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 05:23 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you. It seemed angsty to me, but it is also hopeful. In my mind, Sawyer does stay and I think his daughter might have a greater influence on him than he would have on her, teaching him to trust a little bit more. It's so hard to imagine people as damaged as Sawyer or Kate being parents but it's interesting to entertain the idea that it might be a kind of salvation for them.
elise_509
Jan. 24th, 2008 06:40 am (UTC)
My god, you've made me like the idea of Sawyer and his daughter Clementine. Please consider yourself a genius maverick. Make yourself a crown. :)


halfdutch
Jan. 24th, 2008 06:54 am (UTC)
Ha! *proudly wears paper crown*

Thank you, hon! I confess, it's not a storyline I've loved on the show but this little idea took hold and wouldn't let go. Very pleased you liked the results this much!
alemyrddin
Jan. 24th, 2008 09:11 am (UTC)
Sawyer smiles at her, strangely shy himself, and, just like that, she smiles back, a mirror of his own dimples appearing as if by magic.

This was heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time. Loved it.
halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:39 am (UTC)
Aww, thank you, hon, that's just what I was aiming for. :)
quiet_rebel
Jan. 24th, 2008 01:51 pm (UTC)
It's angsty, but just with a tad of happy. I love it. It feels good to read Sawyer fic again :)
halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:40 am (UTC)
Thank you! :) It's always a good time for Sawyer fic!
fosfomifira
Jan. 24th, 2008 02:18 pm (UTC)
Oh, I read this last night (right before my computer decided it was done for the day) and it broke my heart into a thousand little pieces. I can see this happening. I wish I could see it on screen because it's pitch perfect and Sawyer deserves this second chance of sorts, melancholy and heartbreaking and just hopeful enough. It couldn't be any other way.

Love it.

Edited at 2008-01-24 02:19 pm (UTC)
halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:41 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you so much, hon. *huggles* I wasn't in love with the idea of Sawyer having a daughter (and that name!) but I wouldn't mind seeing a scene like this either. :)
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halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:43 am (UTC)
Oh wow, this is maybe the best feedback I've ever gotten. Thank you so much! :) I think someone loving (and trusting) Sawyer unconditionally would be just what he needs.
siluria
Jan. 24th, 2008 06:59 pm (UTC)
Awwww! See distraction is good. I do like the tentative beginnings here, and the blind trust that must seem quite out of place for Sawyer.
halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:45 am (UTC)
Awww, thank you! :) Sawyer would be thrown by a child's pure trust and innocence, I think. We know they're kind of his Achilles heel but his own daughter? Yeah, I think she'd melt him completely. ♥
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halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:46 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you! I wasn't sure if I should write this as Heath and his daughter were on my mind and I figured it would be too sad for everyone. But I'm glad you found it sweet. *HUGS*
demonqueen666
Jan. 24th, 2008 11:07 pm (UTC)
Sawyer smiles at her, strangely shy himself, and, just like that, she smiles back, a mirror of his own dimples appearing as if by magic.

Aww. I am such a sucker for fics about lil' girls and their angsty daddies.
halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:47 am (UTC)
Awww, thank you, hon! Kind of a sucker for that combo myself!
meredith44
Jan. 25th, 2008 12:48 am (UTC)
I was reading down my f-list and I saw that there was a story about Sawyer and Clementine. My first thought was "a Sawyer kid-fic? Ummmm.... no." Then I saw it was by you, so I decided to read it. So not a typical kid-fic (obviously), and I really enjoyed it. It was so bittersweet and lovely. Thanks for sharing.
halfdutch
Jan. 25th, 2008 07:48 am (UTC)
Aww, thanks for taking the gamble. It's not my usual forte and I wasn't going to write it, at first, but I'm so glad I did. Thank you for reading and for this fb. :)
janie_tangerine
Jan. 25th, 2008 11:17 pm (UTC)
This makes me like that storyline (which I really didn't). It was just perfect and so poignant at the same time, it may be angsty but that's just how it should happen, if they ever get to that. I could so picture him feeling like this and the last two lines are a blow.
halfdutch
Jan. 26th, 2008 04:07 am (UTC)
Wow, thank you! I wasn't really a fan of that storyline either, and kidfic really isn't my thing but somehow this idea took hold and wouldn't let go. Thanks so much for your lovely feedback.
inthekeyofd
Jan. 27th, 2008 04:40 am (UTC)
Freakin' DAMN!!!

I love this, I love that Sawyer is meeting Clementine, I love that he wants to teach her lessons, but he wants to push her on the swings more.
halfdutch
Feb. 2nd, 2008 03:22 am (UTC)
Aww, thanks, hon! :) He might just stick around a bit, make sure she's okay.
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