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Last Request (Sayid fic) PG

Title: Last Request
Summary: What Sayid should have done
Spoilers: Up through "Collision"
Word count: 333
Note: Not sure if it's a suitable present, but written for eponine119's birthday.
Warning: Not recommended for any fans of Ana Lucia



Sayid picked up the gun. The woman steeled herself, ready for the impact of the bullet. He tried to imagine where those four bullets had hit, to see the blood coming out of her mouth.

He weighed the weapon in his hand. He knew just where he’d deliver the shot. Whoever had fired those four bullets had wasted them.

He hadn’t shot Locke when Shannon had begged him to. He’d put down the gun then, tried to reason with her. They couldn’t just devolve into eye for an eye out here, he’d insisted. Her look of disgust cut him. He thought he’d lost her then, but he knew he was doing the right thing, that they’d both regret it if he’d given in to her wish, a demand born of unspeakable grief.

Now she lay dead just a few feet away. “This I can do for her,” he told himself. Whether she would have wanted it or not didn’t matter. It was what he needed to do.

He held the gun to the woman’s temple. She flinched but didn’t run away, didn’t fight back. He gave her no warning. His stomach tightened when he pulled the trigger. She fell sideways and he stepped aside to keep her body from touching him.

Looking down at her, he felt no regret. He felt nothing at all. He tossed the gun aside and walked over to Shannon’s body. It was better to pick her up, to cradle her against him, than to see her like that, as waxen and lifeless as a mannequin.

When he looked up, Jack was staring at him, grief and shock on his face. He looked beyond Sayid, to where the other body lay, and he frowned and dropped his head, but he said nothing.

No one spoke to him about what he had done. No one went near that place again.

Eko buried her, but even he never mentioned her name. It was almost as if she had never existed.

Almost.

Comments

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isis2015
Nov. 30th, 2005 01:13 am (UTC)
I love that you didn't use her name. I loved that Sayid couldn't care less who she was, what her name was. All he knew was that she'd killed the woman he loved and nothing else mattered.

Makes me sad. Well done.
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 01:58 am (UTC)
Thank you! I don't think he *would* care who she was. In my mind, all he heard was that she'd been shot before, to his regret that she hadn't died then.
holycitygirl
Nov. 30th, 2005 02:19 am (UTC)
OOOOOOOOH Chills. I got chills.

That would have been so gritty and realistic and powerful. Talk about cutting edge television. But oh well

Cutting edge fic instead. Powerful and realistic and gritty fic instead. You are just toooo good. ;D
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 03:05 am (UTC)
Oh wow! *is staggered from teh praise* Thank you so much, hon!!

Of course, you know I'd prefer this scenario to the one we got. ;-D


eponine119
Nov. 30th, 2005 02:33 am (UTC)
Whoa. Short and unusual, but good. Yay for birthday fic. :)

I saw this and went, "Sayid? halfdutch wrote a Sayid fic?" I guess I should have seen the subject matter coming. I don't know if that's what Sayid should have done, but it would have made certain things a lot nicer on the show, and no one could blame him for taking revenge.

The last 2 lines of this story are so powerful and chilling, though. Because while Ana Lucia is effectively erased, the things she's done can't be undone so easily.
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 03:08 am (UTC)
Aw, yay, glad you liked it.

I can see why they'd want to keep the conflict they'd introduced going by keeping AL around, it's just ... *sighs.* Well, no need to go into all that again here. But I do think if he had just shot her, there would have been no repercussions, except possibly from Mr. Eko and I think even he would take the high road and let it go.

There is no way to make it like Ana was never there, sadly. :-(
_fortunes_fool
Nov. 30th, 2005 02:59 am (UTC)
Great, as usual :)

I love your fics, do you mind if I friend you?
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 03:10 am (UTC)
Aww, thank you! And yes, please do! ;-D

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philomel
Nov. 30th, 2005 03:58 am (UTC)
A rather diamond hard and quasi-icy tone to match perfectly with the subject of the fic. It wouldn't be difficult to imagine Sayid reverting to his old ways of steely calculation and retribution, once faced with such grief again, although I do think his time post-Republican Guard has given him a strong sense of remorse.

Interesting and well-written.
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 07:58 am (UTC)
Wow, I'm really surprised you read this! I guess I thought no Ana fans would want to read it. Thanks for the kind words.

I'd be much more interested in seeing how Sayid would cope with any remorse than putting up with any more AL, but hey, that's me.

I'm actually disappointed that no one on the show seems to be able to hold a grudge. Everyone lets go of grievances far too easily, like Sayid letting Locke off the hook about knocking him out and destroying the transceiver. You'd think he'd be more outraged. But then again, the last time he thought he knew who the culprit was, he completely overreacted.

All I know is I couldn't just forgive and forget if I were in his shoes. I don't know if I'd be capable of murder but I couldn't just cohabitate either. I guess we'll see what they do with that dynamic. :-/ And once someone had murdered another castaway, they'd be beyond redemption wouldn't they? Except that's what they're trying to do with AL and good luck with that!

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guineverekay
Nov. 30th, 2005 03:59 am (UTC)
Hell yeah
If the show had actually gone like this, maybe I wouldn't still be bitching and cussing about it to anyone who will listen.

You rock :)
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 07:42 am (UTC)
Re: Hell yeah
Woo, thanks! I can only hope she makes a speedy exit from the show and we're not subjected to her for the whole season.

foxxcub
Nov. 30th, 2005 04:48 am (UTC)
OMG NO SAWYER! It's a red letter day. XD

halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 07:34 am (UTC)
Only my (counts in my head) third fic with no Sawyer!

And mmmm! Windswept!Josh! ;-D
demonqueen666
Nov. 30th, 2005 05:33 am (UTC)
Wow. So short, yet so powerful. I don't know so much if this is what Sayid should have done, but it's definately something he could have done. In the sense that I could have totally seen this happening and being in character.

Great job, of course. Like anything less could be expected of you.
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 07:30 am (UTC)
Awww. How sweet are you? ;-D Thanks!

Well, I certainly wish he HAD done this instead of just walking away. I'll just keep hoping that it'll happen at a later date.
rogueapprentice
Nov. 30th, 2005 06:46 am (UTC)
Ack, I wished you'd have warned me there was Ana hatred ahead.

If nothing else, it was powerful.
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 07:28 am (UTC)
Sorry!

I thought it would be clear from my very public feelings on the character and the summary (though it was brief) what kind of fic this would be.

But then again, I've been rather fair to her in the past two fics I've put her in so I guess maybe this did come out of nowhere.

I'll put a warning on.
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alliecat8
Nov. 30th, 2005 09:04 pm (UTC)
A little wishful thinking, there? ;D

This was excellent. You did a better job with this than they did in canon. Sayid's reaction in canon was far, far too restrained. I can totally buy him just coldly blowing AL away. It should have happened that way. Thanks for giving me an alternate scenario that I can at least pretend really happened.

Look at you, writing non-Sawyer, and look at me, reading it. *takes own temperature, and passes you the thermometer* ;D

Loved it!
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 10:12 pm (UTC)
Yes, definitely wishful thinking!

I can't quite buy Sayid's not even hitting her. *sighs* If ever someone deserved to be shot, it's AL. Weirdly, I didn't blame her so much when it happened, but then in Collision, her "they're bending over backwards to try and manipulate us" backstory and MR's lousy acting just ratcheted up the hate.

I'm just going to pretend she IS dead from now on.

So glad you liked this. Just an idea I wanted to get out. ;-D Thanks for reading it, hon!
ellel
Nov. 30th, 2005 10:42 pm (UTC)
She fell sideways and he stepped aside to keep her body from touching him.
Raw and powerful.Loved it!Sayid killed her and Eko buried her...
*shivers*
halfdutch
Nov. 30th, 2005 11:53 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I guess I thought of it all in rather stark terms. I was just going to have them all leave her body there and never go back but Eko would definitely bury her since her buried all those strangers. But I don't think he would try to avenge her death in this case since she had (literally) asked for it.

Thanks for reading!
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