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Three Kate drabbles

Three Kate drabbles (altho not exactly 100 words) for the lostsquee prompt, "Fire."
Spoilers for "Left Behind"



FIRE 1

“You can’t just keep fillin’ in for your mom.”

“She’s sick.” Kate averts Bob’s shrewd stare. “I don’t see how it makes any difference to you, as long as someone’s here, working.”

Bob shrugs. “Last time, okay? Tell her to come herself tomorrow. Or she’s fired.”

Kate nods; that sick feeling in her stomach has nothing to do with the smell of greasy hamburgers and burnt coffee. There’s no way Diane’s bruises will heal by tomorrow. No way she can show her face. But Kate works the whole shift anyway, smiling as wide as she can at the customers because she needs every extra dollar from those tips.


FIRE 2

He’s drunk, stumbling out of the truck like he does every night.

You’d think that driving drunk like that, he’d wrap the truck around a tree sooner or later. No such luck. She’s lain awake at night, praying he would, swearing she wouldn’t be sorry even if he took a carload of innocents with him on the road to hell.

He smells the gas but he’s too drunk to care.

“You are beautiful.” It’s the last thing he ever says to her. Right after, “Aren’t you gonna take my pants off?”

She revs the bike. For a second, she thinks there’s still time to go back in, time to shut off the gas. But the second passes, and with it any regrets she might still have. She drives off, not looking back as the house explodes into flames.


FIRE 3

She doesn’t even look at Jack.

The whole walk back, she keeps her focus on the back of Juliet’s head. When Juliet leans closer to Jack, laughing, she shifts her gaze. A head shot would be too quick. She focuses instead on the space between Juliet’s shoulder blades. Even with the backpack, the rifle Sayid is carrying would stop her dead. Not quite dead. She’d have time to cry out, time for that impassive face to freeze in permanent confusion. There’d be time for Jack to try to save her, take her in his arms as she gasped blood.

And then Jack would turn to look at her; his hurt and shock proof that he’s still Jack and not the zombie who doesn’t even acknowledge her.

With each step closer to camp, she imagines pulling the trigger, lets the command play over in her head. Fire.

Comments

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lil_orli
Apr. 6th, 2007 09:02 am (UTC)
wow i love your writing and the way you write Kate who is still my favourite character sick and twisted tho she may be lol

Loved these three drabbles the two from the past and then the great one with her imagining shooting Juliet just to get any kind of reaction from jack love it
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 01:02 am (UTC)
Oh wow, thank you! :) I like taking Kate pretty dark because somehow I still find her sympathetic in a way that I haven't with the other "tough" women they keep adding to the show. After that last episode, I can imagine that capping Juliet would defintiely cross her mind, at the very least!
toestastegood
Apr. 6th, 2007 11:44 am (UTC)
God, that last one's creepy (in a really, really, really cool way). I can see the logic there.

Such a good use of the prompt.
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:59 am (UTC)
Thank you! :) I don't think Kate would just shoot her in cold blood but she can sure as hell daydream about it! I know I would. Glad you liked this!
quiet_rebel
Apr. 6th, 2007 01:03 pm (UTC)
Oh, great use of the word fire esp. in that last one.
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:59 am (UTC)
Thank you! That seems to be everyone's favorite! :)
iamalreadyinuse
Apr. 6th, 2007 03:28 pm (UTC)
I agree with quiet_rebel-- I absolutely loved the "fire" in the last piece. Really chilling conotation. And I love that you can give us this really sad portrait of Kate in the first drabble and by the time we get to the 3rd one she's just really cold blooded and it's not out of chracter at all.

And thanks for writing kate! I am still always amazed to find ppl who like her too :-p
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:57 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad this worked as a progression. :)

Of course once I thought of firing a rifle and Kate, there was only one person she'd want to set her sights on! And yes, I am still a Kate fan. Possibly more than ever. I'm not a fan of the way she treated Sawyer but I can chalk that up to her being skittish and damaged and scared of intimacy. And I tell you, the more they shove Juliet at us, the more I plant my feet firmly on Kate's side. They have yet to bring in another female character to rival her, who's both tough and sympathetic. They only manage to get the "tough" part of the equation!
zelda_zee
Apr. 6th, 2007 04:36 pm (UTC)
Wow, three, and all excellent! I love how the word 'fire' is used differently in each one. The meaning in the first and last are ones I don't think would have occurred to me.
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:53 am (UTC)
Thank you, love! It's a great prompt! Look at how inspired everyone's been! I thought it would be fun to explore the different definitions. I had originally thought of using someone else for the "getting fired" one, like Locke or Hurley, but I'm glad I could find one that worked for Kate, who's never really held a regular job as far as we know!
demonqueen666
Apr. 6th, 2007 05:37 pm (UTC)
Oh, good job. I love how you used fire in those three different ways, giving us a different (and yet the same) glimpse of Kate each time.
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:51 am (UTC)
Thank you! I was mostly focused on trying out different definitions of "fire" (and possibly using different characters) but once I decided to go all Kate-centric, they ended up being more related.
themoononastick
Apr. 6th, 2007 07:13 pm (UTC)
These are superb! I love the three different meanings for the word, that's a wonderfully clever use of the prompt. They're all fabulous but I think the last one if my favourite 'cos it's the darkest and, yeah, I like that kind of thing. :)
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:49 am (UTC)
Thank you so much, m'dear! I'm still giddy over yours! And we both wrote Kate! I swear, the more they shove Juliet at us, the more ardent fan of Kate I become. And yes, hurrah for the dark side. Particularly if it involves Juliet biting it!
frightened
Apr. 6th, 2007 08:21 pm (UTC)
Oh, I like these. Wonderfully in-character, and I like the three progressively more dangerous meanings of 'fire' as Kate just gets angrier. And wanting to get some reaction, any reaction out of Jack - And then Jack would turn to look at her; his hurt and shock proof that he’s still Jack and not the zombie who doesn’t even acknowledge her - even if it's by hurting him for his own good. You've definitely caught the Kate I adore there.
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 12:48 am (UTC)
Thank you! It was fun to try different definitions of the word "fire." And that's a bit of Mary Sueing on my part in the last one, LOL, because I'd love nothing better than to see Juliet take a bullet to the back!
bachlava
Apr. 7th, 2007 04:24 am (UTC)
Somehow you manage not only to handle Kate much better than show's actual writers sometimes do, but also to do it really, really well. She can be so hard to make sympathetic and interesting at the same time, but you seem to have figured out the magic recipe for this. You got me feeling really sorry for her in the first one especially.

But do you really think Juliet deserves to be shot in the back? *mock horror* Wouldn't it be just as effective, and so much more civilized, to feed her to the Dharma shark instead? (Although sharks and fire, as Buffy might say, tend not to be mixy things.)
halfdutch
Apr. 7th, 2007 03:34 pm (UTC)
Oh wow, thank you! *bows*

Despite all the inconsistency with Kate, they've managed to make her tough and (mostly) sympathetic, a feat they haven't been able to pull off with the other new ballbusting chicas they keep adding. *sighs*

But do you really think Juliet deserves to be shot in the back? *mock horror* Wouldn't it be just as effective, and so much more civilized, to feed her to the Dharma shark instead? (Although sharks and fire, as Buffy might say, tend not to be mixy things.)

LOL! I am all for a creative death for Juliet! I was kind of thinking of using this week long drabble thing to kill her off a new way each day. (And hey, the new prompt is "sharp!") And woo, a Buffy ref! And since you also want Juliet dead, I'd say that makes you my fave new LJ person! :D
gemjam
Apr. 7th, 2007 06:07 pm (UTC)
I really like all of these, they compliment each other really well and give us a picture of the way she works. The first one's really sad, how she has to help her mom and cover for her when Wayne beats her up, how she tries to protect her, which leads nicely into the second one because it really helps us get into her head and shows us her reasoning.

I think the last one's my favourite, it felt so Kate somehow, and I love how part of the reason that she wants to kill Juliet is to prove to herself that Jack can still feel. I like that it's still linked to her trying to care for someone, dark as her thoughts are. You walked that line really well.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 06:02 am (UTC)
Thank you! Who knew, I'm becoming more of a Kate fan than ever, even if she's capable of such dark deeds, I don't think she would cross that line anymore, not in cold blood, but that doesn't rule out her imagining pulling the trigger! Especially when she feels she's lost Jack anyway and she's damned in his eyes and she sees him headed into danger and he just won't listen. I guess it's more of a parallel to her saving her mother from Wayne than I realized!
cmonkatiekatie
Apr. 7th, 2007 06:55 pm (UTC)
I love the progression here, how you can see it. And how you always come at these things from a completely different direction. The first and last ones - again, things that never would have occured to me in a million years.

And amazing execution to. (hee, no pun intended...I can't believe I laughed at that). Anyway, before I got distracted by myself, I was going to say that I love the phrasing of all three, but this part especially:

You’d think that driving drunk like that, he’d wrap the truck around a tree sooner or later. No such luck. She’s lain awake at night, praying he would, swearing she wouldn’t be sorry even if he took a carload of innocents with him on the road to hell.
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 06:06 am (UTC)
Thank you! :) The idea of using the different meanings of the word suggested itself to me before I knew who or what I was going to write about. I thought I might use someone else, like Hurley, for "getting fired" but then when I decided they should all be about Kate, I was happy they could all work together.

And yeah, I don't think Kate cared much about collateral damage when it came to protecting her mother from Wayne. That's the Kate I'm interested in, the one who's kind of an avenging angel. I'm curious to see if Jack being in danger (as she must see it) is going to provoke that kind of reaction from her, although I highly doubt it. Having your "heroine" commit (somewhat sketchily) justifiable homicide in the past to save her mother is not at all the same thing as having her off a romantic rival in the present because Jack has blown her off. But hey, my mind goes to dark places and Kate with it.

Thanks for the fb and support. :)
gottalovev
Apr. 7th, 2007 09:14 pm (UTC)
as everyone said, 3 great takes on the prompt. I love that you did them all with Kate and that we do see that progression in time, and also how she becomes more and more dark. that's the way I love to read her and you do it so well!
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 06:07 am (UTC)
Thank you! As I was just saying to someone else, my mind goes to dark places and I like to take Kate there with me. She's an excellent traveling companion to the darkside, especially when it involves fire! ;)
inthekeyofd
Apr. 8th, 2007 08:49 pm (UTC)
Yes, I'm totally late in posting responses...you make me read Kate..you are the DEVIL. *LOL*

Oh they are so good!! You really get to the heart of her, with covering for her mother, dealing with that step-father--and really dealing with him, then that last look of Jack as they are walking back.

I swear more went on with her step father, I don't think they'll go there, but you know that happened..you are too good for words, and this feedback doesn't do justicet to just how great these drabble were, I've said it before and I'll say it again..you are a MASTER!
halfdutch
Apr. 10th, 2007 06:10 am (UTC)
Aww, hon, you are too sweet to read Kate fic when you hate her and then to lavish such praise on me. :) What can I say? The more they shove Juliet at us, the more I gravitate towards Kate. She's been the only "tough" island female whose softer side I believe, I guess. What can I say, I need her, despite all her inconsistencies. If I can ignore frog squishing and everything that happened in "Two for the Road," I can definitely overlook a few Kate issues. :)

Thanks for the love and reading in the first place!
inthekeyofd
Apr. 10th, 2007 08:21 pm (UTC)
I always give credit where credit it due, she may not be a favorite but you write her so freakin' well, I have to read it..you are evil for doing that to me by the way. *smile*

See, for me, they are sort of pushing me away from both of them..it's going to be interesting to see how this all plays out, I mean no one is going to trust her (as they shouldn't) but if Kate pushes her, will Jack pull away from Kate???? This just may be a very very good storyline just for the dynamics of it alone.
uhzoomzip
Apr. 16th, 2007 02:02 am (UTC)
wow - 3 drabbles for 'fire'? go you, overachiever! :-)

these were great, but i particularly loved number 1 - i could definitely see kate trying to cover up wayne's abuse, but even to the point of going to work for her? so sad.

and i love kate planning how she would shoot juliet - awesome!
halfdutch
Apr. 21st, 2007 11:38 pm (UTC)
Thank you, dear! I know I'm not the only one to do double or triple drabbles! ;) The idea of exploring the different meanings of "fire" really appealed to me and then I was even happier to be able to tie them all together.

I do think Kate was a very devoted daughter. She can be so fiercely loyal that it's scary. And damn, I would love to see her shoot Juliet too! Not that she'd do it out of mere jealousy but surely canon can give her a compelling reason? (I'm actually rooting for Jack to do the deed... although it may not come to that, sadly.)
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